Thursday, September 18, 2014
She was sure this was where she had left him but somehow he mysteriously disappeared. She had chosen this exact spot because it was extremely hard to find and was so dark. In the middle of her weeping about not finding him she seen something out the corner of her eye dash behind a tree. After surveying the area she put her head back down but yet again she seen the same thing. When she arose her head this time it was seven foot two hundred ninety five pound man who looked like he was dug up from a grave. In his hand he held her friends head. She tried to run but the man snatched her by her hair, lifted her against a tree and as soon as she felt the blade touch her neck she awoken from her slumber due to a loud clamor.
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Great ending Nazihar, I didn't expect that to happen. Are you sure this is a hundred fifty words though?
ReplyDeleteThis story reminded me of a movie I watched. Ii like how it kept me interested from beginning to the end of the story. Also, you dot a comma after the word but in the first sentence.
ReplyDeleteI like the violence in, gives the story a sort of suspension at the end when she wakes up before he kills her. Good job naz
ReplyDelete^^ I agree with Sarah it might be a little under. Your should try adding how she felt when she awoke. I lied I like the ending maybe you should try adding what she was before she figured out her friend was gone. Other than that I really liked your story because it has a lot of suspense great work!
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